Dogs are very playful and like to do outside activities with you. Unlike cats, cats are lazy and like to sleep on most sunny days. You may be thinking that having a cat as a pet won't be a fuss at all. Think again! Cats are very bossy and they can get you into a heap of trouble, by scratching all the furniture in the living room. As for dogs, they are very friendly and easy to be around with.
Dogs can be really good pets, especially when you need someone to cheer you up or if you are in need of help. For example, drowning in the pool. You should already know that cats hate getting wet, but dogs care more about their owner then getting wet or cold. Who knew dogs could be like an actual human or a great pet to have!
Speaking of a great pet,
Hi Faith I really like what animal you thought was better than the other.I could tell which side you were on since you said it on you introduction. I think you may want to see if your points were strong enough to convince people that dogs are better than cats. You mainly talked about how dogs can help you emotionally, you never really talked about the animals needs and how they are better than the cats. Not all cats hate water, it just matters if you have trained them or not. You did really well for a ten minute piece of writing, even though you didn't have that many ideas.
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ReplyDeleteI like how I can see your personality and personal voice clearly through your writing, yet you still manage to balance the formality for your intended audience. This is a great skill.
I really like the variation in your sentences and how you use long and short sentences effectively. I know that given more time, you would have been able to elaborate more to make your writing longer, even though this was a challenging topic, as you have never had a pet before!
Well done overall.
- Miss Birtch