Recount Writing! (;

Through this Term, I have been writing a recount about my Christmas Holiday last year. I had to include an introduction, a conclusion and a reflection at the bottom. I do have things to improve on which is the reason why I am at school today! I really hope you enjoy this piece of writing and please take a moment to write a comment on what I should do better next time! (:

Last year in Christmas I celebrated with my older brother, Allen, his girlfriend, Endara and my messy little brother, Blessing. We spent Christmas in Auckland and it was really fun. One of the things we did was springing up and down in this fun place called Gravity and I was totally party out.

As I was getting ready with Blessing, I heard a knock on the door. Allen and Endara was waiting for both of us under the shade. We left the house with excitement since it was Christmas. The plan was to go to the Zoo, but unfortunately it was so boring and hot that I could just melt. The only thing I found fun was feeding the pigs and chasing some little chicks.

Next, we all went to go grab something short before lunch. We had an option of smoothies or ice-cream. I chose a medium size smoothie with my favourite flavour, strawberry! I was feeling so excited of where we were going next that I decide to slurp my smoothie very loud so I can annoy Blessing.

Later on the day, Allen drove us to a fun place called Gravity. Gravity is a fun place where you can bounce all day. It is very similar to Mega Air in Christchurch. First of all we got blue wristbands and socks that had a strong grip under it for safety reasons. The blue wristbands were like a time limit. If you hear the colour of your wristband called out, then that means your time at Gravity has finally switched off. I had a great time, but I was way too hyped that I lost most of my energy for the day.  

After having a great time, the sun shined brighter than it was before. Endara bought fish n chips for lunch along with some drinks. We went back to Allen and Endara’s house to eat the fish n chips. To be honest I find fish n chips in Auckland better than the ones in Christchurch. Don’t judge me, I was just being honest.

While the sun was setting, it was time for Blessing and I to head home. I felt so tired that my legs could barely walk. Either then that I was so glad to spend the day with Allen and Endara. Oh and Blessing too, but mostly Allen and Endara!

Reflection:

I think my work is year 8 quality work because, I think my punctuation is correct and that I have capital letters in the right spots.

For next time, I think I should do a simple introduction that will make sense to others.

Next time, I would like to improve on the words I am using and use words that are exciting for other people to continue reading my Recount Writing.